Lu Marielle

thanks colleen!! and ed, or whence.. i did crit two pieces before posting mine...

Thanks for your comments!! They did help a lot! :wink:

hi Cuni!! sure we have an international atmosphere 'round here!! i'm argentinian, where are you from??

First poem I write for something that's not school, hehe... Not very good, in my opinion... so I know it need lots of critiques!! Please tell me what you think. ...

Hello! I also liked the first poem, though it truly lacks punctuation!! There should be a period after resistance, I believe. Umm, maybe you would also like to replace the ...

Hi! Overall, I think this poem is a bit simple, and that you could add that something else to make it more original and to make the situation a bit ...

Hello! Umm, I think your poem has, let's say, potential... It's just, the 'if' poems are a bit used, not quite original... May be if you wrote some of your ...